Stories of Tie Up Games

Nice cliffhanger at the end of chapter 4! I think, Ruby is in proverbial doghouse. Can't wait for the next part. Good work!

Thank you for posting the next part :) My favourite sequence in this part are the two conversations between Hayley, Gayle and Natalie. The two detectives trying to keep morale up, even if the situation is difficult. One thing I don't understand in the dialogue between Crawford and Hayley, but maybe ...

Very nice!

I'll be glad to read it

Many multipart Stories have a problem: Sometimes they have no end at all - and sometimes the structure is lacking. Nothing Personal on the contrary is perfect. Every piece falls into place. That is quite a Feature for so long a story.

Intriguing!

Think of it! How frustrating this must be for Haley, Natalie and Gayle? No Chance of escape what so ever. The restraining System is foulproof - and Crawford does not leave anything to chances. And so the Ladies have to hope for a wonder - with a little help from friends ;) Let us hope, they will get...

I like the short Dialogue between Natalie and Gayle after Haley was carted of to Crawford. It shows how difficult it is to keep morale up in this situation. No chance für escape. Not knowing what the Future will bring. The doubt, on the verge of dispair. Good work!

Lizzie is an absolute bitch. She reminds me of Dolores Umbrige - well Crawford is prettier, I have to admitt. Poor Haley ......

I read correctly? A second attempt? That sounds like music to my ears:)

Well, and now the rescue Mission is one the way. Let's see how it unfolds Louise Williams is an interessting character. I find her the only villain in this Story, I can in some ways sympathize with. She is not an Uberbitch like Martinez or especially Crawford.

I like the Idea of an alternative ending

I always wonder about the name of Elizabeth Crawfords Island I think of it as Alcatraz or Chateau d' If of Alexandre Dumas. That leaves only one Question open: Where is Abbe Fariah?

Promising first Chapter!

I like the interactions of captive and captor. For a future chapter: Maybe a mummification Scene? Carol as Princess, caught by the evil High Priestess, who wants to bury her prey alive, mummifying her first.

I like the insights, we get, of the thoughts and feelings of our heroines. For example: Haleys and Natalies Frustration over the dire situation, they are in. Haleys last thought at the end of this chapter, about getting a fresh diaper, shows this clearly. The Situation must seem hopeless.

I like your style of writing. The Story is thorougly thought through and very well written! Good work!

Nice Idea!

This first chapter was very promising, light and playful in style. Very good!

Thank you for posting the next part so soon And so I will eagerly wait for the following chapter! Thanks again!

I agree! I like this Story!

Oh, and I can hardly wait for the next part of this epic saga, even if I know the Story already.

Good Story!

Nice one!

I agree! Cruel and sexy Good writing!